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·         Introduction

o   How we got here

§  Revolutionary war

·         - many people fought and died so  we could live in a nation where we choose the leader, and not have one born into the position

§  Civil rights

·         - more people died /fought to ensure their right to vote

§  Women’s suffrage

·         - the amount of effort that was put in to have women be recognized as eligible voters.

o   American Idol

§  # of American Idol voters recently.  (Explain Inflated number)

§  Vs. number of voters for 2008 Federal election

o   Decline of Voting in established democracies

·         Thesis__________________

·         Body

o   Statistics

§  Recent American voting turnouts

§  Countries with vs.  countries without

§  Countries with both   

o   Possible Consequences

§  What has happened in other nations

§  What could happen in America if used.

o   Ways to use Compulsory voting in America

§  How the ways differ

·         Types of punishment

§  Pros and Cons of using each way

·         Conclusion

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The issue I am trying to resolve is the lack of voting in America in our history which continues today. I am proposing that American mandate a compulsory voting act that would make voting required by all citizens of the United States. This I believe would increase voter turnout and therefore have everyone exercise their right, not privilege, to vote.

Thesis: Theirs lays an issue in America with voter turnout, and something must be done to increase the turnout at each election. I believe mandatory voting should become an American ideal to increase voter turnout.

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1. The issue being discussed is the positive and negative impact social media has on the current generation, generation y.
2. THe four perspectives being used are the following: a.young people (generation y) b. The parents of Gen. Y c. Marketers d. and education heads.
3. The introduction is phenomenal, it gets the readers attention and forces them to think about the issue. The conclusion however, seemed rushed.
4. The author does a great job at not creating a bias, and effectively offers both sides to the reader and lets them choose. However, the whole essay seemed extremely rushed like it was written hours before turn in.

Outline For Paper III

·         Introduction

o   What is compulsory voting

o   Where is it implemented

§  How is it implemented

o   America and Compulsory Voting

·         Body

o   American Voting turnout

§  Facts and figures of American voting

·         Is our voting turn out sufficient enough where we don’t need compulsory voting

o   Countries with vs. Countries without

§  If applied does the result constitute a significant increase in voter turnout

o   Effects of Compulsory Voting

§  Liberal View

·         Does it have an impact on the liberal chance of being elected

·         All inclusive views

·         Demographic of liberal voters

§  Conservative view

·         Traditionalist- keep ways the same

·         Shift in chance of election

·         Demographic of conservative voters

§  Anti Compulsory

·         Demographic

·         Infringement of freedom

·         Not democratic to be forced to vote

§  Pro Compulsory

·         Demographic

·         Why pro?

·         Conclusion

Section III of In class Writting

3.When I researched key words "Asian American" and "sport"  a lot of the articles were about the uprising of Asian American basketball player Jeremy Lin. Other articles were focused on Asian Americans in baseball, and lastly their was a sole article on women Asian American sports players.

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N/A. "National Voter Turnout in Federal Elections: 1960-2010". www.infoplease.com. 2011. 03/14/2012.
          http://www.infoplease.com/ipa/A0781453.html
This site did not offer any information regarding whether or not voting should become mandatory in America. However it offered staggering, cold cut statistics of the voting turnout in Federal elections from 1960 up until America's most recent Federal Election in 2008. With the facts laid out it became very visible that the turnout for American elections are serverely down. 2008, which was the highest voter turnout in history in any American Federal Election only had 56.8% of the people of legal voting age come out and vote. These statistics prove that something must be done to increase the voter turn out.

Riley, Cam. "Compulsory vs. Voluntary Voting". http://www.southsearepublic.org. 11/2011. 03/14/2012.
          http://www.southsearepublic.org/article/317/read/compulsory_vs_voluntary_voting.

This article, written by an Australian living in America displays the positives and negatives of Compulsory voting (mandatory) vs voluntary voting. The author, who's from Australia which is a nation that has a Compulsory voting intact has first hand knowledge of the positive and negatives of this type of voting. The author lives in America now, and has access to what are the apexes and downfalls of voluntary voting. His first hand accounts of each type of voting is very powerful towards my paper because, instead of being facts, figures and hypothetical situations his knowledge suggests the actualities of both sides.

In Class Writting: 03/12/12

1. The main argument of the essay is that baseball had been considered for a long time to be the American sport and when Ichiro Suzuki entered the game Americans thought a Japanese player could not play a predominately American sport. Also, he goes on to suggest that American generalize any Asian person as the same race and ethnicity, even if they are really Chinese some tend to ignore their Chinese background and just call them Asian.

2.  The author's perspective on Baseball being the American sport suggest that Americans think they should be the best at the sport of Baseball simply because they are American. To have a Japanese player come in and succeed in the "purely" American sport skews the norm for most Americans and their viewpoints on baseball. Kang argument is clear on his topic of  Baseball being viewed as the sole American sport. However, there lies a problem with using the term "American" sport because their is  a lot more to being an American than what Kang suggests.

3.When I researched key words "Asian American" and "sport"  a lot of the articles were about the uprising of Asian American basketball player Jeremy Lin. Other articles were focused on Asian Americans in baseball, and lastly their was a sole article on women Asian American sports players.

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Schoen. "Would Drilling More Alaskan Oil Cut Prices". MSNBC.com. N.D. 02/28/2012.
      http://www.msnbc.msn.com/id/12993250/ns/business-answer_desk/t/would-drilling-more-alaskan-       oil-cut-prices/#.T02nCfG8529

This source is not really biased on the issue of drilling in Alaska, if it were it would suggest the possible harmful impact on Alaskan wildlife and only that. But instead of focusing on the possible negatives the article. Provides the scientific facts that support the fact that drilling in Alaska would not be worth the time and money spent. What we would save would seem minuscule.

Nixon, Robin. "Oil Drilling Risks and Rewards". Livescience.com. 07/25/2008. 02/28/2012.                                                  http://www.livescience.com/4979-oil-drilling-risks-rewards.html

This is a source does not have a bias on the issue. Instead it offers both the risks and rewards that would possibly occur if America decided to drill for oil in Alaska. This article is mainly directed towards people who do not have a stance on the issue, and this article lets the people decide. First the article suggests the possible effects on marine wildlife that may occur if USA drilled in Alaskan waters. Then it transitions to the effects on land wildlife if drilling were to take place. Next, it transitions to the risks involved with reaching and transporting the oil. Lastly, the article utters the predictions of how much oil would be forged if it were to be unearthed. The facts of how much oil there actually is and the impact on wildlife lets the reader decide if they want America to drill or not to drill

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 In my research of my three possible arguments, of marijuana legalization, oil drilling in American, and  the ending of Affirmative action, I found bountiful research options for all three. However, for the legalization of marijuana  I found no shocking statistics, it was just the same arguments over and over. For the other two I found plenty of information, but the information on Affrimative action was much harder to locate than drilling for oil in America. All these options came with many counter arguments for my paper which was satisfying to see. I am most leaning toward writting about drilling for oil in America.

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Affirmative action: A.  The equal chance for everyone to get a job or admittance into a school. B. Some people get a job or admittance to a school who are less qualified than others. C. I think it should be eliminated. WHat makes this legal, what are the circumstances of it and how many people does it affect.

Legalization of Marijuana:  A. Should marijuana be legalized. B. It is a drug seen by most, but cigarettes are legal and have much more damage than marijuana. Possible gateway drug. C. I think it should be legalized. D, The damages of marijuana smoke, how the damage compares to use alcohol and cigarette and the damage they cause.

Drilling in American Soil for oil: Should AMerica tap into its own oil supply and not depend on foriegn oil. B. it is controversial because possible damages to endanged American wildlife. C. I dont have a developed side yet. D. I'd like to learn how much oil America has, where it is, and what damages could possibly occur.

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Zachary Gorman
English 102, section 111
February 20, 2012
Waters Annotation

Waters, Alice. "A Healthy Constitution." The Carolina Reader: Third Edition. Ed. Lee Kauknight and
     W. Matthew J. Simmons. Southlake, TX: Fountainhead Press, 2012. 337-338. Print.

1. Food according to Waters can be a very valuable source to teach the American youth. More specifically, according to her,  it can help teach democracy. Through her program, edible information children learn some core components of democracy. They learn "" farmers depend on the land; we depend on farmers; and our nation depends on all of us".  So we must be able to interact positively with each other to help each other which benefits the community and at the end of the day we also benefit.

2. By understanding where the healthy foods come from kids understand where their food comes from. Thus, they become  more aware of the community around them. With the knowledge gained the students then become more responsible and better people in general. She supports this claim by stating the school in Appleton Wisconsin has "transformed" troubled youth by serving healthier food and teaching the students about their food. I think her claim is a giant stretch and definitely could use more supporting information.

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Thesis: Mark Bittman draws great attention to the health problems in America as they relate to our intake of immense amounts of unhealthy foods. Knowing the correlation he proposes an idea to "knock out two birds with one stone" by suggesting and backing up a tax on unhealthy foods, which as a result would make America healthier and possibly stimulate the economy.
I) Bittman builds his credibility by exposing the truths about American consumption, and how this consumption makes America unhealty.
      a. Refers to Standard American Diet
      b.Talks about health concerns that come with the typical diet. i.e. diabetes
     c. Penny tax on soda
             1. puts down rebuttle of hurting processed food industry.
II) Appeals to audience
      a. publish in a source where heath concerned individuals read
      b. Need for healthy america is urgent
              1. most unhealthly continent by far.
III) Justification of argument.
     a. Examples of countries that have unhealthy food taxes
              1. brings up american cities that considered tax
     b. Benefits if tax passed, tremendously outweigh the possible downfalls.
 By bringing attention to the undeniable health issue in america. Bittman, offers an idea to the people that can stimulate the economy, and make America healthier. In doing so it would also take America from last on the health scale to a Continent that once again is leading the world in one aspect of life, Health. Doing this all could be done by simply taxing unhealthy foods that are popular in America.

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In the article  Factory food artificially cheap, bad for your health by Ethan Huff, Ethan's central claim is that  America should turn away from the new found factory farming method and revert back to the all natural agricultural ways of the past.  He thinks this because the negatives that come with factory farming out weigh the pluses. He assumes that american people want to eat and feed their children food that will make them healthier and not unhealthy. 

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Question 2.
      In his essay Matthew Scully said "If reason and morality are what separate human beings apart from animals, then reason and morality must always guide us in how we treat them, or else its all just a caprice, unbridled appetite with the pretense of piety". This one sentence has a lot of sub-surfaced meaning. What Scully is trying to explicate is one simple, yet crucial idea that helps defend the rights of animals who are the victims of factory farming. He is saying that human beings are the top of the food chain, we are at the pinnacle because we have what no other species has, reason and morality. The gifts of morality and reason are things we must fully utilize or it will be a wasted gift, and wasting them would put us back on the level of every other animal. Thus, when we are presented with an issue as appalling as factory farming we must not turn away and ignore the subject, but we should turn to our resources of reason and morality and ask ourselves, "is this gruesome reality something that should go on?". Therefore anyone with  well developed morality and reason would agree  with Scully, and myself, would say that something as wretched as this must be fixed.

Question 3.
       Scully has a simple and meaningful stance on animal rights. He clearly says that animals are not equal to humans, which anyone would agree with. He goes on to say that, though they are not the same as humans, they do deserve to be free of horrific establishments like factory farms. He does think it is humane to kill these animals for food, but the killing should be pain free. Not just pain free at the time of death, but the animals should live a pain free life and not be cooped up in a cage with scarce feeding, all while living in ones on excrement. Animals should not have the rights of humans, claims Scully, but they should not be subjected to a life like they face in factory farms.

Concerns For Paper 1

The concerns I have for my first English paper include the following

1. My second body paragraph concerning Crown Royal may be underdeveloped.

2. My first body paragraph concerning Coors light may be a little too wordy.

3. I feel my conclusion was rushed and underdeveloped.

4. Overall grammar may be questionable.

Zachary Gorman

English 102-11

2/1/2012

Introduction 1.

In the competitive market, a seller wants their product to stand out among all other contenders. To do this, the seller must advertise and advertise correctly. One of the fiercest competitions is the selling of alcohol. Alcohol is advertised everywhere, on billboards, television, and in magazines. To have a product bought it must stand out, not by just displaying facts about the product, but also by using creativity. Coors light and Crown Royal both take the art of creativity into account when advertising their respected products. However, each is advertised in different ways but to the same audience, men, but the finer details of the advertisements narrow the audience down to two different generations of men.

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Zachary Gorman
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1. The journal my ads are typically seen in are typically male purchased. For example, mainly my ads are seen in sports type magazines, like Sports Illustrated.  Also, they have been seen in "male entertainment" magazines like Playboy and Maxim. The Crown Royal specifically can be seen in Golf Digest, which is typically relating to older generation males, as the drink does.
2. The topics cover in these magazines include sports and all the information of specific sports from college football to professional hockey and everything in between. Also, where this product is advertised some magazines cover male interest. Like visuals of attractive women, the up and coming tools, and male products like razors, shaving cream and things of that nature.
3. The demographics of these magazines' perspective audience cover a very wide range of people. Mostly, all the people are male. But the variety increase because these ads are seen in any magazine with male interest.
The demographics of Sports Illustrated include the following: Average income of 60,913, average age37, 77% of clients are male, these men typically lead active lifestyles, and are sports fans.  (information from echo-media.com)
The demographics of Golf Digest is a little different. The average income is 93,795, average age of 49, 80% of the readers are male with active lifestyles and like sports mainly golf. (information from echo-media.com)
The demographics of Playboy are the following: 82.7% of the readers are male, most readers range from 18-44, average income is 50,571 but 31% of readers have an income of 75,000 +, there is an even split of married and single reader, and all readers are either employed or a student in college. (information from pbs.org).
4. Other products advertised in these vouchers are cars, male skin products like shaving cream and razors, lawn equipment and handy tools.
5. For the Coors light advertisement which can be seen in both the Playboy and Sports Illustrated the seller is assuming that his audience is reading these magazines. Since their demographics match. Coors appeals to younger generation drinkers, with a little less income and assumes that the readers enjoy sports and manly things, and Coors typically plays on the fact that you should enjoy a frost brewed Coors light while watching your favorite team play. In the playboy it plays the card that men enjoy this but not necessarily women, thus the slogan on the advertisement "Impress you pals.... bore your girlfriend".
The Crown Royal is typically advertised in the Golf Digest and it is assuming that it audience is older and has a higher income, which the readers of these vouchers do. So, it is playing the older man card by using the mans best friend feature to relate to its audience.

Zachary Gorman

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Visual Advertising.

1. These two advertisements are displaying two different types of alcohol. The first is Coors Light which is a beer and the second is advertising Crown Royal which is a whiskey. Both these ads were taken from the internet, but they are often displayed in sports magazines including: ESPN Magazine, Sports Illustrated and Golf Digest.

2. The main audience targeted for the first ad are men from the ages of 21-35. For the second advertisement it is targeting men from the ages of 21-60. Thus, being advertised in sports magazines that men typically read.

3. The Coors light advertisement uses a lot of different styles and themes to attract its audience. First, it uses the classic snowy and fresh Coors look meaning this beer is refreshing and cold. Also, this is mainly advertising the new cold activated blue label on Coors light. The advertising of the new label is done by placing the bottles on top of a picture of the Rocky Mountains with one beer very blue illustrating that the beer is as cold as the Rockies. To further advertise the new label it has the saying "New certified bottle, Amaze you pals. Bore your girlfriend." This shows that this is being advertised towards men because it claims only guys will find the new color changing logo awesome while the girls won't understand the importance of enjoying a cold beer.

     The Crown Royal advertisement is very plain to say the least but it definitely gets the point across. It is plain because the male audience it seeks does not necessarily like complexity, older men enjoy the simple things. Next, the main focal point of the ad are the two dogs. Dogs are commonly know to be "mans best friend" so it is a great idea to have two dogs in the ad. Now in my detail one dog has a newspaper in his mouth signifying the dog gets its owner the newspaper each morning, and under that dog is a subscript "Obedience School Graduate." The next dog is holding Crown Royal is its mouth, signifying this dog can not only get a newspaper, but it will fetch its own his Crown Royal as well. Underneath that dog is the subscript saying "Valedictorian", which puts to shame the other dog who was just a graduate. So for a dog to be a Valedictorian it must fetch the best drink to be the best dog.

 4. I choose these two because in my family we have big Crown Royal drinkers and big Coors light drinkers and I wanted to see how the ads appealed to the audiences. The ad runs on the stereotype the whiskey and beer are mainly for men. The Coors even calls out women being bored with beer, while the Crown Royal use the dog, as "mans best friend" to appeal to men.

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Zachary Gorman

English 101 – 111

1/22/2012

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The article about the environment in “What Will Future Generations Condemn Us For?” from the Carolina Reader, takes a strong stance, arguing against deforestation. The article argues that our future generations with loathe us for many things, and one being the current treatment of the environment. By saying the current treatment of the environment will make people of the future unhappy, the author is also saying something must be changed in the way the environment is being raped. With this being stated, the author argues that reformations must be made in order to save what seems to be an inevitable end to the earth’s lush, green land. To back up the claim, the author provides some light facts about desertification. He says that barren wastelands can be seen in satellite pictures take of Russia. With that in mind according to http://www.effects-of-deforestation.com  we have gone from a planet with 14% rainforest to only 6% as of today.  If that was not bad enough, the authors claim that future generations will not have a lush green earth is put into a reality by http://www.effects-of-deforestation.com/  as well, because it claims that in the next 40 years all our rainforests will be destroyed by the hands of desertification. With his claim he opens people’s eyes to the truth of what is going on in regards of deforestation, and his claim argues that something must be done, and done quickly because time is not on our side.     

Another argument is made with the picture of the red white and blue bald eagle with the subscript that says “These colors don’t run.”  The picture is using the eagle and colors to represents America, and American people as a whole.  With the bottom inscription trying to describe how Americans are. The illustrator of the picture is saying that Americans are fearless and will battle anyone who tries to wrong them. This point also says that the typical American has a great sense of pride in his nation, and therefore will not hold back to defend what they love. Thus, with a very serious no fear claim the picture has, it acts as a warning, and attempts to intimidate other nations. Also, the picture can act as a reminder, instilling a sense of pride in an American person once they are revealed the picture. So, this picture claims that Americans are a very loyal and unafraid people. In claiming this, it acts as an intimidation to outsiders, or a reminder of what it means to be American to Americans.

SWA 2: Response to "Get Smarter"

In the review section of “Get Smarter”, “The Carolina Reader” brings up an excellent question with regards to drugs and augmenting intelligence. The textbook asks if the reader agrees if using drugs to augment a person’s skills in anything, from baseball to intelligence is fair. My answer to that is yes and no. I hate to be on both sides of this but, if the use an augmenting drug is fair or not depends on the given situation heavily. For instance, Cascio says using a drug is not cheating it is just having the better thing, or the upper hand. This is true, especially in military use with the modafinil, which is a drug that helps military personal stay alert and awake while deployed. To be alert and awake is necessary for their safety and survival while in combat. So, in this situation I think using an augmenting drug is appropriate and legal. However, Cascio also brings up augmenting drugs in baseball, like steroids. Here I think the usage is illegal and cheating. First, it is against the rules of baseball which already proves it is illegal. But secondly, the drug is not necessary; a person can get more muscular with hard work in the weight room, so this would be cheating. Bringing back up the military drug modafinil, it is not realistic for a person to stay awake and alert for thirty-six hours. So, for an augmenting drug to be legal, it deeply depends on the situation and whether or not the situation justifies the use of the drug in my opinion.

SWA 1: Previous Writing Experience.

In the previous semester we were required to write multiple essays with regard to multiple different theoretical texts and creative writings. Mainly, my writings consisted of finding the deeper meaning of an essay, and elucidating what the deeper meaning was truly saying. Aside from writings like that, I also did a lot of comparative essays. To compare two essays, I would mainly bring a theoretical text into conversation with a creative literary piece, and vice versa. With the writings I had in my portfolio I was quarrelling one of three things. First, I would dispute the deeper meaning of a literary piece. Secondly, I would argue what a theoretical text allows one to see within a creative literary piece. Or, lastly, I would debate what a creative piece knows that a literary piece does not know, and how that affects a person’s view of the two writings while comparing them. Personally, the greatest accomplishment writing wise for me was the last piece for my portfolio. I feel this piece showed how much I had advanced throughout the semester, whether it was constructing a quality essay, or getting my thoughts down on paper successfully. So, the last essay entailed all the skills I picked up and that is why it was my greatest accomplishment of the semester.

            With my last essay being my greatest accomplishment in my first semester of English in college, it also took the title of being my best writing ever, I believe. It was so good because like I previously said it contained all the writing skills I gained in the past and put them on display. My worst essay occurred my sophomore year of high school where we had to do in class essays. The was so terrible because I was super unprepared to write the essay, and only having forty-five minutes to write it, thus, I could not develop my thoughts as well as I would have like. So that was definitely a terrible experience. With those two experiences in mind, I conclude that the bad experience affected me more, mainly because it left a terrible taste in my mouth and I did not want to experience that again.